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Everyday, I think about the importance of using good punctuation so I can exchange emails with my old friend Thurston. He moved to New Zealand to learn how to surf. He loves to surf big waves, but must watch out for the sharks that swim close to shore. The sharks are huge. They have sharp teeth. He was almost eaten yesterday, but managed to swim to shore quickly. It was a scary experience.
Everyday, I think about the importance of using correct punctuation, so I can exchange emails with my old friend, Thurston. He moved to New Zealand, a vast island in the southwestern Pacific Ocean. He is passionate about surfing and loves to ride the colossal waves that tower over his head. Sharks with pointy needle sharp teeth swim close to the shore while he surfs, so he must be very diligent and swim swiftly to the shore if he spots one. He was almost devoured by a sneaky shark yesterday. It was a horrific experience he will never forget.